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    dots Submission Name: She's Gonedots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 598
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 706



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    B.E.L

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    dotsShe's Gonedots
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    You said it wouldn't work out
    And I left with nothing gained.
    She walked right back in your life,
    as if nothing had ever changed.
    Now you're sitting here crying
    And you're sitting here alone
    You're letting the tears keep falling
    Because now she's gone.

    First tears, no one notice
    Its for good bye.
    But your tears, falling harder
    It makes me cry
    And I know it should show me that something's wrong.
    My tears can fall
    doesn't matter
    But your tears can
    cause my heart to shatter
    And your tears will keep falling, because she's gone.




    Submitted on 2011-11-29 18:33:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello,

    I just wanted to say that I focus on the feelings of your work a lot more than on your writing style. Its a deep sense of selflessness and sorrow that I can relate to. A common feeling to want someone so much and that person wanting someone else. Unfortunately we don't realize that we are worth so much more until its too late. Im sure there is someone that wants you just as much...
    Good write and hope to read more vivid description on your next piece :)

    Ibelikeso
    | Posted on 2011-11-29 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]


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