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    dots Submission Name: Jerk...dots
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    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Sometimes letting go is the right thing to do, even when others are hurt by it.


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    dotsJerk...dots
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    I saw your picture today
    and somehow it all made sense.

    The punishment of my actions
    is not as harsh as I deserve.

    It was coming all along,
    just as always; I was right.

    Why put you through a struggle?
    All the pain of a pointless fight?

    Freedom for me is now gone
    all I had was taken away.

    "for a greater purpose",
    I beleive or is what i'd like to say.

    why would I let you suffer with me
    when your better off on your own.

    Yours is a brighter future
    once you have left me all alone.

    I see us drifting
    we go our separate ways.

    I see you walking
    moving towards brighter days.

    The truth is I was loving you
    more than you'll ever know...

    by acting like a jerk
    when I simply let you go.

    I gave you freedom
    and let you have a choice.

    When I killed my heart
    Would not let it make a noise.

    So even while you hate me
    for not being by your side

    I wake each day without you,
    each day wishing that I would die.

    because I know, my destiny
    has driven us away.

    from eachother and our love,
    which in my heart will forever stay.




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      You know your destiny? It seems like a very empty life to be so unhappy and depressed...why is that, what brought this poem about? Why are you so full of these types of emotions?
    | Posted on 2011-12-17 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      First I love the blue dragon. The poem is very honest if sad. Honesty between people is probably more important than anything, perhaps even love which can be easily fooled by our own wants, needs and desires (different things). Some of us can't even be honest with ourselves, let alone anyone else, but

    "for a greater purpose",
    I beleive or is what i'd like to say. (note on believe)

    why would I let you suffer with me
    when your better off on your own.

    Yours is a brighter future
    once you have left me all alone. "

    represents assumptions that should not be made a veneer mode of depressed self-sacrifice. Relationships are more important than that.

    "I know my destiny" No, we never really do, but we can sometimes try to direct it in a wrong direction as well as a right one.

    Very thought provoking insights here into how some people might deal with such things. As always, it is directed towards the object which needs to hear it most.
    | Posted on 2011-12-01 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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