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    dots Submission Name: Where Holes Made Incompletedots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhere Holes Made Incompletedots
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    Somewhere in your gaze I find
    a little piece of peace of mind.
    Somewhere in my heart I sing
    for love that's lost and love for me.

    Am I so enamored
    that I might stammer
    and fail to find the words
    where they have always been?

    Where in my mind was once alone
    my dearest Schelbi made her home.
    So do you also dream of me
    and you and I and us and we?

    When I see her I know
    and my lungs they explode
    so deep in my chest.
    It's a quickness of breath
    the feel of your flesh
    release for the stress
    that continues to press
    and twist and stretch...

    Until the day arrives
    when your eyes meet mine
    and I find once more
    my piece of peace of mind.

    To make me whole
    where holes made
    incomplete.
    To make me bold
    where meekness
    gave defeat
    To make me love
    when lovings
    not for me.




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      Wow, I enjoyed this so much - it only describes what else can be described - the reunion of what love is to be. Kind of reminds me of a long distance relationship where the would be person gets to see the person sometimes - not all the time.
    However maybe that sometimes might just be only a few hours when they are separated for a time.

    overall, great piece, well enjoyed :)
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    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by InsanityVanity | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful piece...i can feel the emotions in it.
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