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    dots Submission Name: Trivial Bonesdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTrivial Bonesdots
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    this is my latest bone to pick
    or is it a scab
    the dried blood peeled back
    to expose bright red
    pity?

    why do I constantly gasp for breath;
    feel the red creeping
    up my neck
    burning my cheeks
    when I have something I need to say?

    because in my life war is only on the tv screen
    it doesn't matter that a boy can never
    hug his mother again
    in my world women are not blown to pieces on the way to get groceries

    it barely registers

    the thought that some African tribes mutilate their little girls with shards of dirty glass

    seems too awful to ponder for too long

    that children are sold for sex and shipped in containers like fruit

    it seems too impossible, too ugly, too horrid

    but I stomp my foot when I can't find my
    car when I leave the store

    in my world it is about me
    that I blush when I speak in front of crowds
    that my sister doesn't return my calls
    that I twisted my ankle on the way to the door
    that my life doesn't mean more

    these are the bones I choose to pick
    meager, trivial bones




    Submitted on 2011-12-02 04:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We draw circles around ourselves, and then circles within circles, and circles that overlap, also others outside that only touch by the edges, then there are those we don't even want to touch at all. Around all of this there is one big circle that holds everything. This is our universe. We can only juggle so many circles at once. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Venn_diagram

    Lovely bit of realization you've written.
    | Posted on 2011-12-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah the blissfully ignorant life of the shallow and self centered . Personally I say , give me a girl with attitude problems . I know it's depressing to consider the state of the human race , and further I'm probably not going to change it with my meager feelings . But I don't seem to get to chalk it up to triviality . It causes me deep seated feelings of abysmal abjection and hostility . Sure I pretty much keep them to myself , try to live the honesty of my trivial bones , but even still I have deep seated visceral feelings . I don't understand how you live without them . Or do you ?

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is really a strong piece, reflecting how often people just bitch and moan about how awful their lives are when the reality is...others have such misery, poverty, hardships in life that does make our problems seem so trivial...

    we complain about being hungry because we missed lunch...when there are people who can't get one decent meal in a day...

    in foreign countries, the bombs, the killing...
    the women blown up in a grocery store, while we complain that we have to stand in line at the checkout for five extra minutes...

    this expressive piece says it so well...so many readers will undoubtedly be able to put themselves in the speaker's shoes.

    and at lest the speaker in this poem has shoes...

    some people in the world would just like to have any kind of shoes to put their feet into.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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