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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    the depth is what we are speaking of
    infinite space and time exceed my rational thought process
    and obliterate my senses

    Overwhelming
    the very fabric of my being
    Carrying
    a tune across my lips
    that my ears will not hear

    A light performs spectral glances from my eyes
    a subtle sparkle
    and a hint of home




    Submitted on 2011-12-02 10:06:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is nicely done. I think "rational thought process" and "the very fabric of my being" might be a bit commonly phrased though. I like the use of internal rhyme in "that my ears will not hear" and the eye rhyme of "Overwhelming/ the very fabric of my being."

    I hope all is well,
    Amy
    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Home is where the heart is, but sometimes even though we know it is where we belong, we won't hear of it...we are too scared...of love
    the depth of it frightens our very being, the feeling of being overwhelmed...the hesitation...but ultimately we know...the door is open, and home beckons.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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