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    Author: Midnight_Toker
    Elite Ratio:    0.67 - 13/232/500
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotslostdots
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    Why ask me?
    when im only still learning,
    you come to me when youíre on fire,
    but dontísee that Iíve BEEN burning,
    turn away and leaveíme yearning,
    with courage and strength in your heart,
    Take me away and lead me astray,
    To a place that isnít so dark,
    Help me to pick up the pieces and parts,
    Scattered amongst the debris,
    The remnants and wreckage ofíall thatíonce was,
    a VAST abyss of memories,
    im a fool searching aimlessly,
    LOST..
    so tell me..
    REALLY
    why ask me?




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