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    dots Submission Name: mystrocitydots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    The heart of a ley line lies in the slip.
    Stop at the stop sign wait for the earth ship.
    The miffed moon’s glow drips on smelted shore.
    Earth sails by, miffed moon sighs, the stars adore
    their constellations. Flow in sliver shine
    in truth, mellow that mesmerizes rewinds
    time to spark a jaundiced eye. A slight
    decline trips time as slim fingers take flight.

    As each wave crests it whispers “I have
    secrets to share before I fade away.
    So I shall leave a wisp of mist
    to glide on swirls of air.
    The sun shall pass my story on.
    that our love may resonate for a time.”

    The mist hangs silver over sacred glade.
    The thirteen chant and dance by swirling rill
    in voices high and fair as fairy trills.
    From a ring of runic stones flairs a wave.

    A standing wave of summoned power
    glows in air grown crackling cold. A movement there
    disturbs the air an avatar she wears
    a goddess seeming. This then is the hour.

    The Winter Queen face serene
    weaves a spell between moonbeams.
    Time flows syrupy slow as she pours
    dreams into a silver bowl.
    A memory flies through ensorcelled skies.
    A tear falls from a burning eye.

    Submitted on 2011-12-03 23:23:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm in love with this. Sighs! I wish I could write something as great as this. Makes me want to be its muse than the writer. ;-) lovely read.
    Thanks Dale!
    | Posted on 2012-08-28 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I can imagine Harold Bloom reading the third and fourth stanzas with the same authority and sternness with which he reads Wallace Stevens.
    | Posted on 2011-12-06 00:00:00 | by isselman2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      I admit to getting a little thrill just to see you've posted something new. Once again the magic rises like the aforementioned mist. The final stanza seems somewhat edible out of that silver bowl.

    References to time, silver and fluid (which includes mist and sailing of course) are the cat's meow, but it is likely some will have to look up what a lay line might be. Cool, no pun intended.
    | Posted on 2011-12-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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