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    dots Submission Name: HAFDdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 5
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
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    Bytes: 33



    Description:
       every morning I always think of a verse that will follow may day. I do it right when I wake up because that's right after i've done my lucid dreaming, and I feel like my consciousness is more open to things.. (probably sound silly)

    This mornings verse was "Hieghtless air and fallen delirium" .. at the time of writing I thought it was just going to be the title for tonights verse writing, which is usually how I go. I write each one down. First feeling was weird. I thought oh yeah I am going on my first helicoptor ride next sunday. So I was like why am I thinking this now?..Then I get a message on fbook when I get out from the shower from the guy I am going with that it was (surprise)actually today - so we go there, feast on free lobster cakes and stuff, met some really really rich people
    - he tells me he had some 'induced lucid dreaming' and im like ohh cool! (i dont need to be induced ; its an every night thing for me. (oh and think delirium...)

    Next we're waiting for our helicopter ride, then because we arrived there abit late because we messed up the day (so we lost some time) we ended not flying that day and getting a rain check....... saaad. The lobster was good and it was nice meeting the people there.

    Usually they have some predictability to my life, so I know a verse is going to be related to said day - so until the surprise ride surfaced I didn't know what to expect - hm i like that. lol


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    Hightless air and fallen delirium




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      I like the concept, but I'm afraid "hightless" is not a word.

    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2011-12-06 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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