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    dots Submission Name: loved and lostdots
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    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 341
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 559
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       Title says it all... I loved and I lost.


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    All I have is memories of what was there,
    Something so beautiful, to admire and share.
    I once had a love that's enchanting and shined.
    Forever lovers, I wished you to always be mine.
    I want you to stay with me until the end of all time.

    Walking the streets in the winter cold,
    I am waiting for a light to guide my soul.
    I look up at sky and want to pray,
    But nothing comes out, what can i say?
    I just sit here and cry for the rest of my days.

    I thought I was wise, solid and strong.
    Before we met I had not loved for so long.
    You broke me down, got under my skin.
    You moved into my heart, you got so deep within.
    I was enchanted by you, couldn't reason or think.

    So why did I let you just walk away?
    I was not strong enough to ask you to stay.
    Inside I feared that you would let me go.
    I feared I loved you more than you'll ever know,
    My fears are stronger than I would let it to show.

    I was just loving you and giving so much.
    I was filled with your scent, your kiss and your touch,
    Something euphoric, unattainable for some.
    How could I know what was yet to come?
    All I felt was your love, a feeling so numb.

    So I met you, then I loved you and simply let you go.
    My fears came from nowhere, like dark gothic crow,
    With my fears brought misfortune, losing what I want most.
    Bringing the pain of knowing my love I had lost.
    Being without you, of all things is the worst.

    All these fears I had finally came true,
    All the fears I had of forever losing you.
    Im left alone, it happened once again,
    I have nothing to prove and nothing to gain.
    So of all these things emptiness and pain is all that remain.




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      All these fears I had finally came true,
    All the fears I had of forever losing you.
    Im left alone, it happened once again,
    I have nothing to prove and nothing to gain.
    So of all these things emptiness and pain is all that remain.


    Seems like this is something straight out of a love poem..."there was nothing filled with more woe than that of her love to her Romeo" this poem is quite tragic...
    Leaves me feeling alone as I am sure you felt when you wrote it.
    | Posted on 2011-12-15 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]


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