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    dots Submission Name: Bellsdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Bells

    he pulled around the corner
    like some sort of James Bond character
    late for a drop
    secrets to be exchanged

    his tires screeched
    and then he stopped
    so suddenly
    I lunged forward

    that's when he looked down at his watch
    turned to me
    smiled
    and kissed me

    the bells at the church on that corner
    rang out twelve times

    and with every ring
    the kiss became
    deeper
    the bells
    louder
    until they were in me
    and I was lost
    in the sound of
    the bells
    resonating
    and the feel of his
    mouth
    kissing me

    and I knew that I would never
    feel like this again

    that it was the perfect moment

    on the twelfth ring
    the bells stopped
    and he stopped
    and we drove away




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      "and we drove away"

    Sounds like driving away from the moment...you're still together, but that perfect moment is no more.
    Maybe you're off to hear some more bells? Church bells? Marriage?
    All of those moments when life felt like a corny movie, gone and replaced by repetitive indifference.

    Just thoughts

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-12-06 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Now you got me thinking I should do something like that to my wife. Nice thoughts once again.
    | Posted on 2011-12-06 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...such a cinderella moment...and after the twelfth chime the carriage turned into a pumpkin....but the scent and feel of the kiss lingered...just what i was talking to you about...the high school girlfriend..cindy...

    and the kisses felt similar to what you described here...never wanted them to end...never felt the same thing again...since.

    this poem is magic in the moment it presents...

    stirred, not too shaken.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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