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    dots Submission Name: I Am Sleepingdots

    Author: catman
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 2/3/5
    Words: 336
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       There was a woman, and then she was gone.
    He doesn't have much of a life anymore; in fact, you could call it just more of an Existence. I just cannot make my own, accurate line breaks happen in this little box !

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    dotsI Am Sleepingdots

    I Am Sleeping

    Between my cardboard suitcase and a distant,
    Reflective highway sign.
    I have let my driver’s license expire.
    My “Social Security” number is lost under a bridge abutment.
    In my second dream, morning steam rises
    From a tan field of shaved, wet grass.
    (The roads and the dreams often laugh together,
    Like they are enjoying some painful, private joke.)

    I am joining the early morning reds and yellows
    By making a sewing needle
    From a thick, triangular bar of rusty iron.
    Perfume, caramel, hot chocolate
    And corduroy thighs, crossed at the knee,
    Speak of hundreds of yesterdays,
    And even before then, as flowers can change a woman.
    There was a baby, later, once, a son.

    (Was there ever a more perfect line for a love poem
    Than the “Fleetwood Mac” song lyric:
    “When you build your house, call me?”)

    Questions and answers will make
    The oldest corner of the past
    Become even older.
    The colors when you step on top of a bug,
    Or when you step on top of an earthworm:
    Is that like a bleeding from underneath?

    Dark, feral angels, down from the blue-green sky,
    Beat those extended, flat black wings past my heart,
    As if they will never let me come to a rest.
    Soft is now extremely hard to find, and even then,
    It is not at all like what it used to be.

    D.W. Boyles
    May 16, 2010

    Submitted on 2011-12-06 20:37:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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