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    dots Submission Name: I Do Not Love You Anymoredots
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    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsI Do Not Love You Anymoredots
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    I do not love you anymore.
    Though face is fair for evermore,
    Now, seems uglier than before.
    Face nor body do I abhor,
    But soul so evil to the core.
    And that is not a metaphor.
    Take your hatred I implore,
    Spewing toxin from every pore
    And briskly walk right out that door!
    "Quoth the raven, `Nevermore'!"




    Submitted on 2011-12-06 21:01:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ha ha ha, this was a wonderful piece, great job. I feel like a lot of people can relate to it...

    and with humor and sassiness, I dig the piece.
    Not much else for me to say I enjoyed the flow and I thought you did a goood job with the rhyming without making it cheesy ( I think is hard to do )

    Very much enjoyed.
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems the author is pointing out to the receiver that it's not their looks that are turning them off, but their actions. the way you say it's not "face nor body" that you "abhor", but the "soul so evil to the core". very eye opening - beauty is a good thing, but it must pour out from the inside to be truly of any worth. very nicely done.
    | Posted on 2011-12-08 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy Day!

    This is very Poe'ish.

    I liked the minimalistic verse with stabbing visuals.

    Awesome!

    Dark and Light Smiles 2 Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-12-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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