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    dots Submission Name: Silence so Sounddots
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    Author: Jawsh00
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 10/11/7
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 621
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 703



    Description:
       Song i wrote about how people in the world giving up on one another. Not really giving chances, just moving on with no remorse or even trying to lift a helping hand.


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    dotsSilence so Sounddots
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    One more sunset
    as the world turns grey
    These lives we live
    The prices we pay
    Excuses we make
    Set-up for lies
    Surrender it all
    As we say good-bye

    Giving in,one last time
    Just breathe,and tear me down
    Stay here, please stay with me
    Listen to, my silence so sound

    Arms wide open
    Do you remember me
    Watching you
    But you can't see
    We bury our past
    Inside the memories
    Death will come
    Behind the scenes

    Giving in,one last time
    Just breathe,and tear me down
    Stay here, please stay with me
    Listen to, my silence so sound




    Submitted on 2011-12-07 11:25:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this song has meaning and i really like that. i could see a music video for this. a woman who is leaving her man because they cannot stop fighting. tearing the kids apart. or a kid getting bullied in school and doesnt feel like anyone cares. And probably some teenagers watching someone beat up a homeless guy and stealing what little he has and then the teenagers just walk away. then something happens and everyone finally sees and then it goes back to the other people fixing things. Maybe i have just too much of an imagination but thats what i pull out of this. its amazing keep it up hun.

    ~ms.understood
    | Posted on 2012-01-13 00:00:00 | by MsUnderstood | [ Reply to This ]


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