Women like me don't fall.
We might snag something with the heel
of our shoe, step wrong, stumble over
something littering the path,
but we catch ourselves and keep on
or maybe even drag it along for awhile
before finally kicking it off, but fall?
Oh silly man! How foolish of you
to think I'd be so clumsy to slip
or trip on something so trivial
as a slick spot like you
greasing my path.
| Love the "tude"! Yet somehow with this I don't get the feeling you are a ball buster either. Need |
I mention the double entendre/Freudian banana slip?
|| Posted on 2011-12-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ] || The writing in this is tight. The metaphor holds throughout and yes, the attitude is quite bold. Quite strong. |
That, "nothing can trip me up" state of mind.
I have that attitude, too, sometimes. But I'm not quite so good at keeping from falling, still, I guess.
I try, but then I stumble, careen forward, and SPLAT! Like something out of an old cartoon.
I never laughed at those. Maybe I sensed that I'd be the butt of the joke someday.
Still, it makes me a little sad. That I even try not to fall. That that has become the goal.
To me, it shows the scars of all the times in the past that it took to get so agile. Few of us are born so naturally dexterous.
Maybe your poem should read, "women like me don't fall anymore". But I guess that would be another poem altogether.
|| Posted on 2011-12-08 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ] || excellent metaphor...and like rubie said...love the attitude in this...|
i picture the snag, the stumble but the catching of oneself just before the guy would get what he wanted...
and we are always told to tell women..."nice shoes,"
cause they like that compliment...
well compliment them but don't get in their path...lol
|| Posted on 2011-12-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ] || A poem with attitude! I love this! You can bend me, but you won't break me....|
And if we happen to "drag it along for awhile", it impedes our steps, it feels awkward and it clings to our shoes until we get tired of it and discard it.
Nice write, Runes!
|| Posted on 2011-12-07 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ] |