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    dots Submission Name: i wonder where you are right now...dots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Prose/Death
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       last night, my family learned that a close friend had hung herself. this is very hard on everybody, especially one little five year old boy. when his mother called to inform us of the tragedy, she called out in her grief for help explaining this to him. within the hour, words came pouring out of my heart. they may seem childish or silly to you, but my hope for this piece is to help one little boy through a very difficult time.....


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    my special friend has gone away.
    how much i'll miss you, i can't say;
    for i'm still young and wonder how,
    and wonder where you are right now.

    my mommy tells me that you died,
    but i do not understand why.
    i only know that you're not here,
    it makes me sad, i shed a tear.

    i do not fully understand,
    i just know it makes mommy sad.
    sister and daddy are sad, too;
    they're sad because they're missing you.

    i have questions i want to ask;
    mommy's not ready for this task.
    will i ever see you again?
    will i meet you up in heaven?

    i wish you knew how much you're loved.
    i wish i could give you a hug.
    i wonder why, i wonder how,
    i wonder where you are right now.

    i don't know why you had to go;
    i only know i miss you so.
    but every day, you know i'll pray
    that we will meet again someday...




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      the hardest things to write are the ones that are closest to your heart I think you did great expressing your emotion. It was real it was honest...beautiful

    Denise
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much believe in this piece and your intentions and I think that you will do a beautiful healing with it.

    Thanks so much for sharing.
    This was real truth and I appreciate you so much for being vulnerable to it.

    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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