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    dots Submission Name: "The Thousands"dots
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    Author: Marybelle
    ASL Info:    15/F Elcajon
    Elite Ratio:    1.54 - 19/37/29
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dots"The Thousands"dots
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    Thousands of people die as we sleep

    Thousands of people go hungry as we speak

    How can we think about me, me, me

    When thousands of people are suffering.



    How can we be so cruel?

    When thousands of people are dying in this world

    Suffering to get food, dying to find food

    Walking the mile just to walk it back again

    Trying to find a safe place for her baby girl

    Innocent and poor, innocent and poor

    Laying on the floor, skin and bones

    Nothing more, nothing more

    Yet...hoping and praying is all that keeps them going

    Hoping for the best, praying for the rest, praying for the rest

    Little kids coming home from school

    To find nothing more than their parents dying on the floor, dying on the floor

    Getting robbed of what they do have

    To get nothing but a disease, nothing but a disesse

    That slowly kills, slowly kills

    Thousands of people die today

    Trying to survive the pain

    Survive the pain

    Thousands of people die everyday

    And we slowly forget them, slowly forget them

    Forget that they were soldiers for the LORD

    Trying to survive this world.

    Survive this world



    By Marriam Miles

    November 26, 2011

    tribute for the African communities




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      i know what you mean ....very good poem


    jane
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]


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