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    dots Submission Name: Solid Faith vs Timedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSolid Faith vs Timedots
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    a glove is wrapped around me,
    the mountain levels out from day to day
    time mistakes itself for the heat of a moment
    pressure builds, then cools, stabilizes, then climes
    fluctuation
    and debris
    carry through the wind
    flow through my hair
    piece together the fractures of insecurity and doubt



    cleanse me
    purify my thinking
    let me see and smell and taste the evidence of your power
    let me smile when I want to cry and slam my feet on the ground
    knowing
    this path
    knowing
    this foundation of living




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      i like the idea of "slamming my feet on the ground"

    that is certainty...positive action without any kind of reserve.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful...honestly there is nothing more for me to say other than I really did love this, it flowed perfectly. I would have to say if I picked something that was my favorite part I like this best-time mistakes itself for the heat of a moment-that makes me wonder in so many ways.
    Great work, thanks
    Denise
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
       SEA OF JOY
    Sad eyed lady of the harbor , standing on the shores of time . With the rhythms flowing through your hair like the washed up colors of a thousand songs in syncopated rhyme . Ill build myself a castle with the borders of the sky , to stand with you forever till the reason is swept aside , and we all live together like integrated minds .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-12-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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