[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: You are a Topicdots

    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 513
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 665


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYou are a Topicdots

    You are not a body
    You__ are a topic
    On which I can write

    Forever make you fallen
    For ever ever wounded
    Still you in my phrases
    And tie you in my hatred
    Salt pepper skin
    With creeping animalism
    Aye! Your bdsm
    Will leash you

    Locked up in the pages
    Thrashing in my cages
    Scumming you for ages
    I shall cum you out never
    Your pricks and the tickles
    Your degrading lessons
    Will bleed my arteries
    Will always moist me
    Dear! You have never known
    The way you have lost me.

    Submitted on 2011-12-09 11:19:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      what a way to unleash the anger...the "bdsm" tripped me a bit...

    but the allusions to sex all the while unleashing fury and saying ...you have lost me...

    "will bleed my arteries/ will always moist me"
    interesting lines...

    a creeping animalism in a creepily good rant.

    would not have wanted to be the subject of this lashing.

    you are no longer human to me...no longer someone with a heartbeat..and mine no longer beats for you....you as indifferent to me now as the topic of an essay i don't want to write.

    | Posted on 2011-12-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]