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    dots Submission Name: Love lost or lingeringdots

    Author: Linzi
    ASL Info:    24.f.wales
    Elite Ratio:    5.91 - 80/100/94
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLove lost or lingeringdots

    Love lost
    or lingering
    slips from my soul like life blood
    I canít contemplate the length of a loss.

    To be lonely or alone?
    Or alone but not lonely?
    Or lonely while not aloneÖ?
    At length itís a long way off from love.

    Once I longed differently
    upon those lusty nights that procured life
    a long insomniac. But
    time laments the left behind lover,

    Who still proclaims it is better to have loved and lost
    than to never have loved at all.

    Submitted on 2011-12-09 13:30:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice one! The 2nd and 3rd stanzas are exceptionally beautifully written.. words playing with meanings.. Love and antiquity.. Love and the rhythm.. Love and the concepts changing abt it.. All are blended up in a soft delicate manner.. Heart touching!

    | Posted on 2011-12-09 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this...not usually the bold letters...but for what you are doing here, they work okay.

    i really like the second stanza...and the ending ---a saying many of us use...and it makes me question it based on your poem...is that just something we say to make ourselves feel better? or is it true...

    i guess it is necessary to feel pain in order to feel real happiness....and as that song from the 90's said..."you bleed just to know you're alive"

    Once upon a time we imagined what love would be like once upon a time...

    been when that fairy tale becomes a reality of disillusionment...then what.

    i like what this poem says to me.

    | Posted on 2011-12-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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