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    dots Submission Name: the drifterdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Solitude of self moving through life. Unfound is not a dictionary word. Maybe it can be one if you use it too.


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    I am the drifter
    without dock
    always moving
    never mooring
    the deep sea below
    unending sky above

    I am the drifter
    without home
    never finding
    always seeking
    unknown lands
    unfound friends

    I am the drifter
    without hope
    unable to hate
    abandoned of love
    and though I am bleeding
    I am not feeling




    Submitted on 2011-12-10 04:58:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy day Jim!

    I immediately got a visual of floating freely in the current. Sometimes there is divine oneness in being the drifter free from all attachment.

    I really appreciated this piece!

    Have a great day with lots of prosperous smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2011-12-13 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      unfound: not found : remaining unknown : undiscovered <a path that links our shores with a shore unfound S.R.Lysaght>

    I found this in Merriam-Webster Online Dictionary. But the word is not listed in other dictionaries. Interesting.

    I thought it was cool that the reference gave an example that went along with your poem.The idea of a drifter . . . the quote about unfound shores that link us. I don't know. I especially thought it was cool because of the "sea" reference. Anyway, I just wanted to share.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the visual in the first stanza, the deep sea and the unending sky. It sets up a beautiful feeling of freedom.

    THen the second stanza introduces to the reader a sense of searching. To me it would be difficult to keep from associating that with some kind of emotion,

    because in the third and in your conclusion you state a sense of numbness to love, emotion, hate, ect. And I am wondering about this in the piece, wondering if there is any consistency in the idea. I think to truly be numb you would not have any desire (which is implied in the searching) Unless the searching are cold facts and the act itself done out automatically, which is not far out of the question.

    My humaness interrupts your words.

    Forgive

    I do like feeling provoked by this piece
    thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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