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    dots Submission Name: Toward Buddhist Thoughtdots
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    Author: catman
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 2/3/5
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       To accept Constant mutability can be one of the very hardest things of all to do...My "line breaks" got all funky, compared to orig'l, when I had to fit into this little box.


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    dotsToward Buddhist Thoughtdots
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    Toward Buddhist Thought

    He had always agreed to meet himself
    Within a life nailed down tight, a life unchanging,
    Not to be stretched out like a carpet over a lifetime of years
    Until it was tired, worn and frayed.
    But as his once clear, now cloudy eyes
    Saw less and less, as the two rough onions of his cataracts were growing,
    Time became much faster,
    As it slid always away from him,
    As it unraveled into the dark.
    And the biggest changes, mostly unwelcome, walked constantly
    Across every threshold to meet varnished oak floors
    That he had covered with red and green rugs.
    The immortal, never ending nature of Mind
    Had begun to weave together past and present
    Into a rough textured, oval design:
    It was the forgotten tenderness of loss.

    Don W. Boyles
    04 March, 2010




    Submitted on 2011-12-10 13:25:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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