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    dots Submission Name: Seasons Changedots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 337/331/94
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSeasons Changedots
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    The air is changing
    as the season rises
    from the earth,
    from the sky.
    Ive forgotten the wild flowers
    that arose in the summer
    and quickly faded in the fall.
    my mind is now set
    to the ground...
    to the soil...
    to the promise of new life
    changes
    and growth.
    The focus is to the roots...
    the ones that have stayed planted
    in the seasons that have changed
    to drown the weak
    and build the strong.
    Let this be the challenge
    not to garden for a day
    but to live in the roots
    for the change of the summer
    is more relevant in the fall.




    Submitted on 2011-12-10 18:18:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      and today my mind has been on seeds,

    I liked this very much,
    sounded to me very spiritual and I agree with Jacob about the love being strongly rooted.

    I think this is a very strong speaking piece. I hope everyone gets as much as I did from it.

    Thanks for sharing.
    Wonderful read.

    Jaz
    | Posted on 2011-12-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      and this poem is relevant...

    careful of "I've forgotten..." typo...


    but i like this...it states to me of steadiness...of love that has foundation, deep roots..that isn't a fly by night seasonal thing...full blown flower in summer, gone in fall...if the roots are strong enough...love goes through its winters...the bad, cold spots..but maintains and in spring bounces back with more beauty and vibrant color...

    grows more roots in summer...and is even stronger the next fall.

    nicely done.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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