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    dots Submission Name: On The Menudots

    Author: rubie
    Elite Ratio:    7.03 - 177/68/17
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOn The Menudots

    On The Menu

    gnawing hunger leads me to your table
    where I hope to find delectable treats
    served fresh daily
    so I'll place my order
    but your take-out offerings
    are all I can get
    because I've arrived too late
    to have a sit-down repast
    couldn't even get service with a smile
    so here's my tip....
    I'll probably dine elsewhere
    and find a corner booth
    that allows me to sit side-by-side
    with my short-order dreams


    Submitted on 2011-12-10 19:41:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a fun little metaphor for a relationship. And, it is true. What is promised is not always delivered.
    I like the idea of ordering "off" menu, myself. Give me exactly what I'm craving or else I will not be a repeat patron. lol

    Anyway, I thought some of your word choices here were great. And I love your "tip".


    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      A quick thought this gave.
    The difference between fancy restaurants and little diners. (Besides the obvious) It's how you dress. When you go out to a fancy restaurant, you dress fancy. When you go to a little diner, you dress like you. You remain you.
    This applies to the majority; some people might dress "normal" at fancy restaurants.

    It's like love. You can always go for those high-class, beautiful people, but to get them, you have to act like someone you're not. Whereas if you stay "in your league" so to speak, you can be yourself and not have to worry too much about trying to impress them.
    And heck, sometimes we just want some take-out.

    I didn't know what to think of this metaphor at first. I thought it might be a little dread. But I can see now that it makes a lot of sense.

    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry, no love available to stay...you can get a quick fix, take it to go...but you can't eat in...

    ah love...and ah, this metaphor...short-order dreams if fulfilled could be a really good entree.

    | Posted on 2011-12-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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