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    dots Submission Name: Frolicdots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Like stripping flowers of their petals,
    you picked this boy apart.

    Now rest assured,

    he loves you not.




    Submitted on 2011-12-10 23:58:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love how simple and straitforward this is. I can relate in relationships we can feel like a flower being stripped leaving a only a dull stem of sadness while all of the hopes and dreams we had lay scatter around us. Nicely done!

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-12-18 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      It's like one of those things you'd put on a t-shirt. Witty, simple, and people will most likely post pictures on Tumblr with this piece plastered over it. I actually haven't read anything like this from this place for a long time. I'm glad I stopped by.

    | Posted on 2011-12-13 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      she'd like to believe
    the world is hers
    and all its pleasures
    are given

    to angels who dance
    round themselves -
    then the stars marched
    out of heaven

    Just my thoughts about your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2011-12-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Less is more...and this piece proves it. Great title, also.

    ~rubie
    | Posted on 2011-12-11 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, cool one this.
    | Posted on 2011-12-11 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Jacob. This is unflinchingly simple and at the same time, full of the complexities of love.

    Great work!

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-12-11 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      perfect...

    the effect is rooted in the depth of just a few budding words.

    she picks the petals one at a time..but he answers her question even before she asks...

    "he loves you not"
    | Posted on 2011-12-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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