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    Author: isselman2001
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 37/47/46
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSee?dots
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    My heart . . .
    The seasoned leaves of summer
    Spring up
    Like old vicissitudes
    Of autumn air
    They bear
    Not repetitious
    Flair
    But on the contrary, the old
    And reasoned meter of
    The ages.


    See? I can write just like they do, and I can make as little sense: Surely no more, and probably no less.




    Submitted on 2011-12-11 01:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      as I confiscate the capes
    of great and gifted sages
    literati who've littered
    centuries with their pages
    I've realized a most peculiar thing
    whether mortals teach
    their words to weep or sing
    rhythm is the conscience
    of the king

    Just some thoughts inspired by some of your thoughts. Am I to gather from the last two lines that you mean you've learned to adapt to a style that feels foreign or pretentious but satisfies a larger audience in ways that seem baffling to you? There is no accounting for what some ears strain to hear.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2011-12-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this without the last two lines....

    and would like to see "The ages there"

    as the last line...i enjoyed the resonance of "air" "bear" and "flair"...but felt it incomplete stopping that line with "ages"---i just was reading it out loud and added that because it seemed natural that it would be there.

    "the reasoned meter of the ages" is a nice image...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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