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    dots Submission Name: Dead Lovedots

    Author: Hazel eyes Jess
    ASL Info:    23/female/new york
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 70/74/29
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDead Lovedots

    I lay sad on my pillow today
    My toothpaste looks gray
    My coffee smells like dirt
    I turn the other way
    I sit heavily on my chair
    Run my fingers through my hair
    I realized then you weren't there
    The world drains of all it's color
    In that split second black and white
    I lost my appetite, your a parasite
    My body has been taken over
    Never will I be the same
    Here we go, lets start the game
    I'm ready for the pain
    My heart has fallen by my feet
    I'm suprised at how it beats
    I can't take it anymore because you wont let me
    I kick it across the room
    It's still beating by the door
    I slam it against the wall
    I feel it beg for more
    The light catches my eye
    I reach for the knife
    I dont think twice as I turn the vice
    Everything that was colorless and dead
    Now drenched in red
    As I go to bed
    with all the things left unsaid.

    Submitted on 2011-12-11 14:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is just how I felt when I lost my Muse. I am married and she is too, but I thought that we would be deep Platonic friends forever. The last poem that she inspired in me was called "The Girl And The Dragon," since that is always the way we thought about each other. If "Girl And The Dragon" isn't on this site yet, I will post it.
    Your "super concrete," almost Painful imagery is what makes yr. poem work so, so well here. When I went to grad. school at UF/Gainesville, I had to break up w/ my Atlanta girlfriend-- you know, long distance relationships are almost Impossible. She brought everything to Gainesville that I had ever given her-- I was so upset that I left everything for weeks behind the door to my grad. student dorm room...
    | Posted on 2011-12-12 00:00:00 | by catman | [ Reply to This ]

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