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    dots Submission Name: Autumndots
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    Author: Linzi
    ASL Info:    24.f.wales
    Elite Ratio:    5.91 - 80/100/94
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsAutumndots
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    Seasonís change
    and the chill has set in on mine,
    crisp mornings bite bone-branches bare
    consuming all life and colour.

    All that is left is flashes of paint
    spiralling downwards to gray stones,
    where the shoes of my children will carry me.




    Submitted on 2011-12-13 21:15:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...and as our children grow older it makes us feel more and more in the autumn of our life...

    and then we start feeling that chill of the end...

    and the imagery here is amazing...they will be carrying my body...to gray stones...the shoes of the children..

    reminds me of the movie "ordinary People"

    when donald sutherland said to mary tyler moore..."we were burying our son, and you were worried about what shoes i was wearing"

    but then we hope to have our children bury us rather than the other way around.

    anyway...really expressive write...moodful imagery.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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