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    dots Submission Name: Curious seasdots
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    Author: Linzi
    ASL Info:    24.f.wales
    Elite Ratio:    5.91 - 80/100/94
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsCurious seasdots
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    Curious
    how the seas painted themselves tonight

    mascara-strokes over ribbons of blue.
    The storm clouds parted
    for glass pools
    and miles of transparency.

    Green tits and black birds
    rippled the image,
    with sapphire rings

    encircling the black lotus flower
    that dipped its dainty head
    beneath the surface.
    Day drew to a stand still.

    Mist glazed
    over the pools of aquatic life
    forever captured in globe-glass.

    They stare unseeingly now,
    like floating glaziers
    drifting
    to worlds far beyond your lash lines.




    Submitted on 2011-12-14 06:39:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wrote something very similar to this last night...

    wow, was your spirit in my pen?

    i will post it soon...

    but this has such beautiful imagery..."worlds far beyond your lash lines"

    quite a good line.

    the lash lines of the sea...nice concept.

    this flows with ease.

    no writing advice on this one...i like it.

    jacob

    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of like being there. I like to visit places like that whether in body or just word. The sea puts on its makeup.
    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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