This is an interesting piece in that at first glance it seems a simple love letter, but tiny details give it the hope of being a bit more than that.
For instance, I like "wake me in the mourning". I hope it was intentional. That somehow this new love wakes the speaker from grief. Stops her from sleeping through life.
I also like the lines:
"replaced by woods and trees and forests of green"
"No mountain will frighten me with altitude"
Some things that didn't quite work for me are:
"troubled waters are forgotten dreams"
It just made me think of Simon & Garfunkel.
Also, the bit about the seasoned eyes. I wanted to like it but it just made me think of either old eyes or eyes getting salt and other stinging spices poured into them. That would be great if it were in theme. But that doesn't seem to be where you wanted to go.
I'm also not a fan of the caps on different words and phrases, like "Devoted Love" and "Thank You" and "Lovers". And I don't get why "MY" is all in caps.
I guess what I'm trying to say is that there is something here, but it needs to be more fully honed to have real impact. It doesn't really resonate as authentic or new or important enough just yet. At least not for me.
Like I said though, I think there is the beginning of something here. Some good lines.