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    dots Submission Name: Kissdots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Wait, what was it you said?
    Oh yes, I remember now,
    "Loving you is too hard."
    But did that mean
    you don't love me anymore
    or that
    you love me more than you can bear?
    I know the answer is here somewhere
    in this long kiss

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      a long goodbye kiss is often never a goodbye. at least in my experience. the playfulness, yet, soberness with which you write is quite well. its almost the heart is half full thing...the last line is vital to the structure. it makes the reader question the relationship, the write and the kiss. why such a lingering kiss goodbye? why not just a so long and thats it? the kiss is a hint that feelings are still there and they are tangled.

    at least thats my 2 pence! overall, great job!

    | Posted on 2012-01-05 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that it's a goodbye kiss kind of gives it away. although it feels like the person on the other side isn't quite aware. ( i guess i'm taking it to mean forever goodbye. as opposed to i'll see you later ) it's all tone and inflection though which makes this very confusing to me. i suppose it could be both because a person can love another in a way that is impossible to bear although stop loving them in another. sort of keeping the love but making it impractical in the eyes of said person.
    | Posted on 2011-12-18 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the glass if half empty half full sentiment in 'loving you is too hard'. on one hand, love should be natural and free flowing, on the other it takes a lot of hard work. i come to realize that it truly is a lot of hard work and its the best kind for its reward is something precious and pure. money cannot buy that kind of thing (i think the beatles said something like that once). have a great day janeplane!
    | Posted on 2011-12-16 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how the question is not answered, but rather a solution is given. A place where the answer can be found: in a kiss goodbye.

    This long kiss goodbye. Goodbyes last way longer than just two syllables. They're a process of murmurs and restless nights. That's how goodbyes happen...slowly...painfully. Sometimes one person is left standing there holding little pieces of something that used to be whole.

    It's hard to believe that someone could leave you because they loved you too much. It sounds like a $10 excuse. But then again, some people can never bear the truth.
    | Posted on 2011-12-15 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I never got that last kiss goodbye. It killed me at first, but then I thought: maybe she was afraid that she might feel something...just maybe.

    Either way, goodbye is goodbye. But I guess it all comes back to the art of breaking hearts.

    I'll be back here...

    I'm not done with this poem

    | Posted on 2011-12-15 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the brevity of this...and the sentiment...somehow i started thinking of samuel l. jackson and gena davis....

    sometimes the kisses goodbye are longer than the ones while we are together...

    or is it that the person spoken to is telling us that we are just too complicated....?????

    interesting questions posed...by this little piece.

    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I think so few of us will ever know what it's like to love someone more than we can bear.....but what exquisite pain that must be....

    I love the suggestion that the answer to your question lies within the kiss....because a kiss really does say so much without words....it's the best way to speak with our mouths....

    Great write, Jane!

    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]

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