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Pink Ribbon Dusk


Author: Epiphany
ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342 /2139 /390
Words: 56
Class/Type: Prose /Love
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A beautiful dusk in Cameron Park, CA


Pink Ribbon Dusk



Dusk
Dresses the Horizon
IN Pink GlowINg
Ribbons

All Nature is Silent
For Cyclical Exchange ~*~

EvenINg
Adorns the Sky
Cloak Technicolor
Dream

All Nature is Silent
Cyclical Exchange

Day hands over
2 Night...

On the opposite
Side of the world
Night hands
the reigns
2 Day ~*~




Submitted on 2011-12-14 20:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Tiffany, you remind me of many wonderful sunsets I've had and of those I've missed. I catch one now and then here in Arizona when I'm not too busy to look up. You make me yearn for the pleasure of not being so absorbed by my obligations and duties to other people and things that I can enjoy more sunsets and sunrises and everything in between. Thanks for the moment. - Jim
| Posted on 2011-12-18 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah, yes, now this is a prime example of your poetry. You have such a unique style, melding nature and spirituality with simple, playful language. It's like finger painting with words...yes, that's exactly what it is like.

I like how the personification of day and night as a dual personage, sort of a yin/yang thing. Day hands to night hands to day hands to night...

Well done, Tiffany!

-Sorrow
| Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by SorrowWing | [ Reply to This ]


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