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    dots Submission Name: Fuck A Player, I'm Hating The Gamedots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsFuck A Player, I'm Hating The Gamedots
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    I've seen you're type.
    Smooth talker.
    Shoulder to cry on.
    Romantic.
    Straight out of the fucking moving pictures.
    Playing it right.
    Keeping your charades tight.
    Tucking a stray hair behind her ear.
    Wiping away tears.
    Looking deep in her eyes.
    Whispering careless lies.
    Getting her hooked in your trance.
    All the while you're just trying to get in her pants.




    Submitted on 2011-12-14 21:00:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      PS love the title too..
    | Posted on 2011-12-19 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it because it cuts to the chase and describes very succinctly how it can be.
    | Posted on 2011-12-19 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece. A lot. Mostly because it really fits my mood right now. Most of the time I don't like the use of the 'f' word, but I feel you used it just right. You didn't over use it, but it wasn't out of place either. This piece is not like what I've seen a lot on here, but I liked it. It's pretty original from what I've read. I respect that. It's a good use of creativity rather than the usual type of venting that comes off as depressed. This has more of a calling you out and maybe going to get revenge style to it. It's a good piece. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2011-12-19 00:00:00 | by stormybluerose | [ Reply to This ]


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