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    dots Submission Name: Nightmaredots
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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNightmaredots
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    My heart is pounding
    Past my breath
    Racing
    Boundless
    Crazed
    Undressed

    Feel the tremors’
    Grip untamed
    Numbs me empty
    Leaves me drained

    Memories flood
    Rush unrestrained
    Taunting flashbacks
    Crash my brains

    Toss me forward
    Throw me back
    Self-loathing leads
    the
    Soul attack

    I lose control
    And grovel ground
    Kiss the dust
    The nightmare pounds …

    …Me
    Nauseated
    Bleed and run
    I’m lost
    Unseamed
    The Past has won.

    Ew61
    December 16, 2011











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      this one tossed me about..i a good way...it is turbulent...catchy...

    i was caught in the torrent...i am dizzy..."undressed heart"

    mine hasn't worn a stitch of clothing for a long time...the past can do that.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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