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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 477
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    The most terrifying partÖ
    is when Iím left alone with the racing thoughts
    Right and wrong are theoretical considerations
    Everything is nothing
    This world is made up by general consensus
    Yeah Iím going to do what I want
    And you can come along for the ride if you want
    Iím going zero to sixty at the speed of pain
    I believe in symmetry
    Aesthetics
    Lust, hate, desire, passion, pain
    Drugs feel too much like home
    Too whole
    Why should I endure your disorders
    And be crucified for mine
    Soon the darkness will sweep in and make me brave
    Itís like the tide
    And when it goes away it leaves me exposed
    Bones and raw nerve endings, a twitching sense of unadulterated uncertainly
    Gasping for air




    Submitted on 2011-12-15 22:06:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it may be raw but its still a very good piece.. i wouldnt change to much if you were really thinking about changing it.
    | Posted on 2011-12-22 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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