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ive got to be good.
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ive got to be good.
close your eyes
because i'm starting to see your soul
and i'm guessing that you truly never listened to me
cause all i wanted was something cheap and quick.
don't lean into me please
the way you look at me is starting to make me queasy
who would of thought that we would end up here
you pulling, im pushing. no one will win my dear.
its been years since we've been here
but the tables turned..
and its ironic that im the one pleading to be friends
cause lovers is to much and to be in love.. well hunny im not.
how do i explain..
i want a cheap, quick, senseless f*ck
i don't want the complexity of love
can't handle what your dishing out this time.
im not sorry, don't think i ever will be
because i made you sign this contract
you agreed to the terms sweets
guess you thought you could win me over..
im all over you, im so over you
close it off before you get to weak
cause i wont help you get off your knees
i wasn't made for something like that.
grow up, move on. get out.
when i walk away i wont look back
so please pull your spine back in and learn to smile
cause for once im bigger then this..
for once im strong and brave
for once im laughing at my past.
Submitted on 2011-12-16 00:16:30
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Oh I do enjoy this. The flow, the feelings. Raw emotion.. blah blah.
But really I like the personal essence. The way your spelling out a short story in poetic form. The tale of a person adapting from past experiences. Brava!
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