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    dots Submission Name: ive got to be good.dots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 428
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    dotsive got to be good.dots
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    close your eyes
    because i'm starting to see your soul
    and i'm guessing that you truly never listened to me
    cause all i wanted was something cheap and quick.

    don't lean into me please
    the way you look at me is starting to make me queasy
    who would of thought that we would end up here
    you pulling, im pushing. no one will win my dear.

    its been years since we've been here
    but the tables turned..
    and its ironic that im the one pleading to be friends
    cause lovers is to much and to be in love.. well hunny im not.

    how do i explain..
    i want a cheap, quick, senseless f*ck
    i don't want the complexity of love
    can't handle what your dishing out this time.

    im not sorry, don't think i ever will be
    because i made you sign this contract
    you agreed to the terms sweets
    guess you thought you could win me over..

    im all over you, im so over you
    close it off before you get to weak
    cause i wont help you get off your knees
    i wasn't made for something like that.

    grow up, move on. get out.
    when i walk away i wont look back
    so please pull your spine back in and learn to smile
    cause for once im bigger then this..

    for once im strong and brave
    for once im laughing at my past.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh I do enjoy this. The flow, the feelings. Raw emotion.. blah blah.
    But really I like the personal essence. The way your spelling out a short story in poetic form. The tale of a person adapting from past experiences. Brava!
    ~D
    | Posted on 2011-12-23 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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