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    dots Submission Name: NY bluesdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNY bluesdots
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    It is the road of sheer confessions
    Confetti sprawled on wrinkled glass,
    Abandoned hopes and lost possessions
    What is there but a violet farce?

    Observe its bearing, steady duties
    Are wearing down upon my knees,
    So little flesh, too dried up cuteness
    And sandbag- fight against the flees.

    My Christmas doom, my New Years widow,
    A search thatís given up for good,
    Oh my striped lollies! Oh honey meadows!
    What was, that was, and there no more.




    Submitted on 2011-12-19 06:45:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a passion play that is a farce...it has left me with nothing but the blues...

    like a new years eve celebration in Times Square spent alone with just memories of a lover...

    my NY days and nights come back to me with this one...

    a bit on the abstract side...but i like that.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-12-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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