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    dots Submission Name: A Challenge With a Random Opject a Paint brushdots

    Author: Marybelle
    ASL Info:    15/F Elcajon
    Elite Ratio:    1.54 - 19/37/29
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       So I was challenged to Write a poem about Paint brushes Random Right Lol Opinions on this?

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    dotsA Challenge With a Random Opject a Paint brushdots

    Paint brush -P- Using my paint
    Paint brush- A- Making art
    ... Paint brush- I- Inproving my work
    Paint brush -N- Accepting critism
    Paint brush-T- Testing my skills
    Yeah Paint brush I use it all the time
    Oh Paint brush I'm the Author of my work
    Yes Paint brush I Make it all Work!!!!
    December 21, 201

    Submitted on 2011-12-21 14:51:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree. Interesting, but a tad too simple. I can't really get into it because there's not not much to get into.
    | Posted on 2011-12-24 00:00:00 | by TheInvisible | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, yet too simple. When dealt the task of writing about a random item.. Think more about what the item may represent, how you might be able to create a metaphor around it, and so on. Like some, my brush is my blade, the blood my paint.. bodies my canvas type stuff. Just a little suggest for the next time. Over all I can't complain much about your piece, but it feels novice
    | Posted on 2011-12-23 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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