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    dots Submission Name: darkened souldots

    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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       Depressed and stressed

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    dotsdarkened souldots

    My heart is returning to a place long since forgotten
    where the soul dwells in darkness till rotten
    I can no longer withstand this cold hearted fate
    its coming up fast at an accelerated rate
    no amount of fight could withstand this onslaught
    battle for such events can not be taught
    fade from light into a deepened night
    till all vision is lost and there is no sight
    to take heart would be in vein
    and my soul captured and slain
    dwindle from what once could be
    into a raptionous deadly sea
    the day is soon at hand
    when I can not wander this land
    forever caught into total abyss
    with forgotten memories of love I shall not miss
    a saving grace is not forseen
    any my soul unpure can never be clean
    shattered into darkened flames
    into a place of no names
    cringe at what shall be
    long forgotten in a darkened eternity.

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      Well, this poem will last an eternity even if our mortal bodies are doomed to return to ashes at some point. There is a yin/yang aspect to all of us particularly on a spiritual level. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yin_and_yang
    But I think you have managed to maximize the dark side here.

    To hear some wise men, everyone's soul is unclean, it is just that some people haven't tapped into any form of redemption which is pretty much necessary on an ongoing everyday basis since all fail and fall daily. It is a human thing, no one is righteous, even the Bible says that. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Righteousness

    The abyss is but one of your classic images touched indicating quite an intellect at work. Very stirring stuff which I can appreciate even if I can't go to that particular side of town myself. My down town is mid town but I stay pretty well up town sometimes to a fault. Good work here.
    | Posted on 2011-12-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. yeah this definitely sounds depressed. the isolation is something i've dealt with. it's confusing when ideation compounds so much that it's hard to remember peoples names and places in the world. i wouldn't give up though. take it as a lesson. as a moment. even if you always can't it's good to remember the part of a process that is beneficial when things get over whelming. I'm in a similar place, but i try and remember to look at things for the benefit and it helps. i guess i'm getting the help i've needed for a while.

    | Posted on 2011-12-21 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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