Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Like Toys From a Toy Boxdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 404
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2423



    Description:
       Hm - just what was on my mind right now - note that the toys are the mental representations - this isn't a pejorative poem.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLike Toys From a Toy Boxdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Like Toys from a Toy Box

    Once more my mind is cluttered -
    Remnants of all those words not uttered,
    Wings not fluttered, and toast not buttered -
    All have spilled out like toys from a toy box.
    In the night, I trip over them, hurting myself in the process.
    By day I stare at their inscrutable shapes - I don't get it.
    I tell myself I need not be able to understand or predict these things -
    I've no need concern myself in their toy-lives and interrupt their toy-thoughts -
    Whether to help them up or push them down
    The damn things are controlled Somewhere Else - Which makes the neat.
    However
    Sometimes
    I want to
    And I can't
    And then it hurts
    Sometimes
    I ask others what should be done with these curios -
    Even as I extoll upon their beauty and value and wonderful features
    I'm advised to throw the damn things out.
    Someone once used the metaphor of Bengal Tigers being great -
    Doesn't mean you can keep them in your house,
    Or play with them like you would a housecat.
    In response I used an expletive.
    None of the fools understand - maybe they understand too well.
    Be that as it may - I'm sure the toys would fit

    If Only I Knew How They Worked
    If Only Instruction Manuals hadn't moldered to dust
    If Only People hadn't Modified - leaving marks and scars
    If Only They Weren't So Busy
    If Only They Would Allow Me To Open Them!!

    but they don't

    So I regard my toys cynically, keeping the pack of if's at bay.
    I would write off to the factory - but
    It
    Won't
    Let
    ME
    In
    Thus my toys litter my floor and I feel powerless
    To this phantoms created outside my reach
    And shipped in fresh every day.

    I feel like cleaning just for the sake of order -
    The comfort of knowing how everything is and will be.
    But during cleaning, things invariably get thrown out -
    Factories get told to stop sending -
    Toys are put in places so that they are never seen again.

    My mind's eye observes that some of these toys
    Just
    Might
    Not
    Fit
    Ever

    What then?




    Submitted on 2004-07-31 20:36:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      in the night, i trip over them, hurting myself in the process...

    that line; so familiar...i have many struggles with things that keep me up long into the night, some of which go back to me wishing i was a child again, when all was toys and they were "clutter" to everyone else except me...being young, the times when nothing seemed like it was necessry to be done in any timeframe, and now...being grown, "grown", you have to clean up every day, and it stll never seems to lessen, be better, easier...
    Advised to throw the damn things out...
    another familiar concept...how awful it can be, trying to explain something to someone who doesn't even come close to gettin your pain/confusion/need for guidance...that'll solve all of the problem...sure, it will...physically. but i think it still lets it ride on the mental elevator, up and down and up and back down...who gets off, you can't always see over the blur...but through crowds and tinted glass, and muzak, you always see who's piling on and on and on...damned closets. what is it, anyway, they always boast more space than they actually contain...misleading all the way. i really like this write. the part about bengal tigers threw me for a split second, then i jumped right back and realized why it needs to be there. this was awesome, good job. hope to see more from you. latah for now~april
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by leper messiah | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, such an intresting topic to write upon.. I like the beginning at which the words blend together right into the next one. The rest has good style, and the choice of words are excellent... all in all this piece of work is going to retire into my FAVs... thanks for the great read.
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.