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    dots Submission Name: Punching Bag dots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPunching Bag dots
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    Find me a burnt up old couch for my tired bottom

    A spring to lift me off the floor

    My tired feet drag through the dirt in the air,
    my soul shifts, coughs, spits its sickly self into my bones
    praying
    for a simple moment to be still

    Still,
    the light moves the earth and the morning comes as promised,
    Leaving my stubborn eyes to wrestle with the morality of puncuality
    and being spent

    A zealous punch gets thrown from one to the other
    A bruise is a sheild as I face this day





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      Find me

    a burnt up old couch for my tired bottom
    A spring to lift me off the floor

    My tired feet drag through the dirty air
    my soul shifts, coughs

    spits its sickly self into my bones
    praying for a simple moment to be still


    Still

    light moves the earth
    and the morning comes as promised

    as my stubborn eyes wrestle
    with morality, punctuality and being spent

    A zealous punch is thrown from one to the other
    A bruise is a sheild as I face this day


    This is a nicely written mantra about taking on the day with a dry tank and a drained mind. I experimented a little with the formatting to get a better grasp of how I felt your words were leading me. You may, of course, disregard any and all suggestions I've made that don't fit into the scheme of what you intended.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2013-12-23 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I find myself in that day as well just a punching bag for the minutes that are in passing. You speak this beautifully and I couldnt of worded this better myself.

    Denise
    | Posted on 2011-12-28 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      Accidence ambience acoustics find
    Tractive tactile taciturn went
    Cantankerous cantilever capacity bind
    Wanton wayward warranty pent
    In extremis extremity exigence grind
    A priori aorist actuator glint
    Futurity fatidic's fornication wind
    Lecherous libido larcenies bent
    Lurid livid laconic mind
    Exergonic ephemeral extant spent

    Excuse me I'm a little bit punch drunk.
    | Posted on 2011-12-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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