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    dots Submission Name: You own and Playdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 363
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    dotsYou own and Playdots
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    Lasting impressions and fallen connections
    inter pressed and frivolously mingled,
    dainty plaster, molded perception
    unattended brisk fullness

    Calling their own thoughts,
    a pulpous moment demanded

    but shrunken dykes a town away
    made you own and play this way,
    but the game wasn't amended

    Torture spread around evenly

    Crafting its perception,
    leading its own feeling,
    demanding their own attention

    Faltering away from the words,
    playing in the intimate fields,
    and watching red maples sinking.




    Submitted on 2011-12-23 23:21:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh that is good.. the descriptive nature .. and really mature expression... that pulled me magnetically to dive down more and more into the depth of its meaning.. thumbs up..! :)
    | Posted on 2011-12-24 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]


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