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    dots Submission Name: Fallendots
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    Author: TheInvisible
    ASL Info:    22/f/The Valley of Doom
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 51/55/37
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsFallendots
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    I'm falling.
    You ring in my head like bells when the earth shakes,
    a vibrating in hips that won't go away.
    Falling.
    Honeyed sweetness comes from your ruby lips,
    coating my mouth with a shimmering magick.
    I'm falling.
    You bring me home with a kiss, settle my soul with your arms.
    Fallen.




    Submitted on 2011-12-24 20:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good imagery, and your word choice is perfect for the piece.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2011-12-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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