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    dots Submission Name: Adriftdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 40/64/74
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsAdriftdots
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    I am lost.
    The winds are strong,
    amongst the skies, never ending.

    Not knowing what to say.
    To his driving force,
    that is creeping ever so closely,
    consuming my very soul.

    His dissipating fringes
    that exist only to end
    my desperate search.

    I have no known idea
    of what I am looking for.

    Indiscernible as to his lies or truths
    I sought after the elusive remedy,
    But there is nothing to alleviate his hold.

    How can his world be shaped,
    when all his words evaporate?

    How can I let my soul free
    when it is shackled down by,
    his anchors tethering my heart,
    to this love as indifferent as the sea?

    Am I afraid to break his chains,
    because they might sunder me as well?

    Once I have learned to swim,
    to cross this ocean of apathetic worship,
    while he has stayed ashore.

    That will be the day,
    his chains have let me go.

    So that I
    Can be released
    amongst the never ending skies.




    Submitted on 2011-12-27 14:08:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this piece it makes one stop and get lost in the words
    well done
    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-12-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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