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    dots Submission Name: Today's Recessiondots

    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 335/330/93
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsToday's Recessiondots

    Im staring to the white sheet

    making a reality for myself
    as I draw blindly
    then find myself unmasked
    among all my chaotic writings.

    Ive twisted to long
    among the tangles in the air

    I can no longer untwist myself...

    is there time to find the knotted weaving
    and free myself before the building burns

    Is there even meaning in finding the way out..

    Today it is the thread
    spun once around my neck
    and tomorrow I know it to be a second
    and the next a third..
    Ive decided its not worth the fighting
    my dreams have spoke to turn out
    and Ive noted the cues

    time to take a bow...

    ~fade to black~

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      I've read a few of your pieces thus far, and am very pleased with what I see. Words typed with feeling and even parts seeming fresh from the thought. I enjoy your style. There's something classic in the flow of your words. I've not very much to say on this work. I'm drawn to the imagery.
    | Posted on 2011-12-28 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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