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    dots Submission Name: What Was... What Is..dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
    Total Views: 655
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    Description:
       Boo was my ex's nickname and he gave me the nickname squishy ... :-/

    Jackz


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    dotsWhat Was... What Is..dots
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    A memory of my past…
    Distant yet close enough to have reminders now and again
    Of what I thought we had
    The love I thought you felt for me,
    For I did feel love towards you

    Remnants of our life lingers within my mind …
    All over my home... Our home
    I wish to hold you
    Long to call you...
    Hear your voice

    All those annoying tendencies that once drove me nuts
    I now pray for!
    Dreaming of waking up,
    Being in "our" bed
    With you beside me

    Ahh... If only my dream would come true,

    Where do you go nowadays, during your down time?
    Can I meet you there?
    Can I see you... Just one last time I swear!
    May I touch your soft, smooth skin?
    Kiss those amazing lips…
    One last kiss I promise!

    I just miss my Boo...
    Don't you miss your Squishy?

    No longer in my present day-to-day life...
    Yet, you continue to occupy my thoughts, override my heart.




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