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    dots Submission Name: A Lie That Made My Daydots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Well, I've been with my current lover/boyfriend for the past 8 months. It's been wonderful to say the very least. Yet I've learned that he lied to me about something. In the beginning of the relationship he told me he'd only had sex with one other female. I thought he was lying, and I was right. Yet not in the way I thought. I had figured he'd had sex with more, when in reality there was no other. I was his first. O.o


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    Why you didn't tell me the truth..
    I'll never know.
    Though, the lie wasn't that big of a deal.
    Yet, my mind is still reeling from the confession.
    At first my brain could hardly comprehend the situation.
    Now, I find myself lost in a sea of wonder.
    The information you've placed in my hands,
    I'm unsure of.
    It's been causing all these brand new feelings.
    Ones that most would think are crazy..
    After being lied to for so long.
    Stipulation and situation play a part.
    Learning all of this,
    Leaves a burning in my heart.
    Who would have thought?
    A lie that could instead open a door,
    rather than slamming it shut as so many do.
    All because I've found that;
    I'm the first to have you.




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      Dam girl this is crazy! But put yourself in his shoes, guys don't even want to be the "one" in the relationship who has yet to loose their virginity. To them it is embarrassing especially once they hit their late teens early 20's as I'm sure you can understand. Gee, I bet you re-think everything walking yourself threw events that expired over the past 8mo and wonder how you couldn't have seen it. But the fact is, if someone does not you to know something then you will not know because they will go above and beyond for you to never find out!!! I met a young man who was honest and told me he hasn't been with a women yet and is waiting for the "one" and still to this day I am not even remotely interested, and yes 110% because he is a virgin and I just do not want to be the woman he loves in that way. Before he told me about his past I was interesting in him. Maybe that makes me shallow but I am just not confurtable with it. Maybe your boyfriend felt he would scare you or make you think some thing was wrong with him... so he just avoided telling you the truth until he was certain you loved him... okay enough rambling for me great write i totally relate, hope everything works out

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2011-12-28 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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