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    dots Submission Name: However Awry dots

    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
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       December 28th
    Crysta Perak

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    dotsHowever Awry dots

    A rather unenthusiastic disaster,
    Blasting through a morbid feeling
    Intervening at a most unnecessary cue
    Cupped and folded; landing forward
    Making an unrealistic view shine through

    Invasions pleas rest upon your thoughts
    Stamps falling off their letters with
    No more destination to be returned

    All the dust breathlessly mingled
    Stationed forward to walk ahead
    Highway nine not leading the way
    As to let our heart free with emorion

    The sins falling into their own place,
    But what place does the doe walk?
    They last the winter in the brisk white
    Making their tracks for sins to follow
    The snow shows even when it is a day old.

    However pleading while they run awry they are
    Never stopping to rest and lay in the folded grass.

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