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    dots Submission Name: A Dying Star, My Dream's Demisedots
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    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       I know there's no use hanging on but I still can't seem to let go. The dreams we created and life we planned, none of it will ever exist and that's what hurts the most.


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    dotsA Dying Star, My Dream's Demisedots
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    How beautiful in dreams life seems
    So fluid and unique.
    Where once my life felt so complete
    Clarity finds me looking bleak.

    Yet as we smile to say "Everything's ok"
    Look past the clouds, you'll see
    There's just the emptiness of space.

    Distant stars, out of reach a million miles away
    Burning bright their sparkling light is meant to mock us and our faith.

    Can hope exist out past the dark and
    cold of space?
    Or do we only grasp our misconceptions in their place?
    Do we fight for dreams that never knew they'd go waste?

    Not of time or effort but of spirit and soul
    A waste of heart and mind
    Illusions die with your love for me
    A waste of flesh and bone




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      Wow. i absolutely love this poem. it is written beautifully. i love the metaphors and i love the flow of the poem in general. its a great poem for people who have had bad relationships and have even lost someone to the angel of death.

    i rarely give full appreciation of a poem with no critics to it. the only thing bad i can say about the poem is that it isnt as long as id like it to be.

    adding to my favorites :-)
    | Posted on 2011-12-30 00:00:00 | by MsUnderstood | [ Reply to This ]


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