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    dots Submission Name: A Winter's Morndots

    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.05 - 368/366/172
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Winter's Morndots

    New year dawns--- its silver
    wings spread across the icy lace as
    my feet shatter the frost. the

    Blackberries have dissolved--- and

    hope blossoms in earthen womb as a
    hidden epiphany at dawn- the

    fox pounces- its face
    flecked in filigree flakes---deferred dreams
    melt between scarred fingers while

    deer prance- embers rising
    iridescent in coronation, as prayer is
    heaved from steaming tongue. the

    solstice sun beckons

    the rabbit from her hole--- a
    Winterís morning

    Submitted on 2011-12-29 03:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I just like the deliberate pattern pacing of crunching
    Frosty footsteps :-)
    | Posted on 2015-05-23 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      This is set up so nicely with the first stanza. Just this clear image of frost, like diamonds, shattering upon the new year.
    Very good stuff.

    And yes, this is a great description of winter, but there is also that underlying hope that lies just around the corner of a new year.

    I enjoyed this piece. I will definitely be keeping up with your work.

    | Posted on 2011-12-30 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Despite winter's best effort
    to dissuade us from the game of life
    each sign is no more than a warm constellation
    encased in vapors that tell us that the time
    is neither wrong nor right
    | Posted on 2011-12-29 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      you know this is beautiful as a piece about winter..and the hope that lies hidden, waiting for the thaw...but it also feels like a poem that speaks of hope that love will sometime soon thaw a frozen heart.

    | Posted on 2011-12-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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