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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Sentinel

    I walk the tightrope
    eyes closed
    care-less-ly
    riding oblivion
    Peril teases
    From the sidelines
    Arousing the sentinel

    She watches
    Whispering directions
    to the rope dancer
    One step at a time

    She hovers from the shadows
    Finds shelter
    Fills the empty corners
    With pieces of herself

    Until I return
    Awakened from dreamy
    Disconnection
    Numb kissed and
    Dazed

    Task complete
    She touches our heart
    Waves goodbye...
    ...Until the next time
    With eyes wide open
    I sit

    EW61
    December 29, 2011








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      I like this although I'm not certain what this is about. Only gaming references come to mind. Is this about that or about something totally different?
    | Posted on 2011-12-29 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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